Repairing
Name : Shobahul Futuh / 1209503159
Smoking cigarette is danger
Some people who like smoking don’t care their health. The people who like smoking are smokers. Actually there are a lot of dangerous in cigarette. They are cancer, bronchitis, impotent. One in ten heavy smokers will develop lung cancer. In some cases can be fatal and cause death, because it is difficult to detect at an early stage. The spread can occur rapidly to the liver, bone and brain. And the other side, smoker can disturb others people.
Outline :
1. Introductory Paragraph
- Smoking cigarette is danger
2. Developing Paragraph
- Cancer
3. Developing Paragraph
- Bronchitis
4. Developing Paragraph
- Impotent
5. Concluding Paragraph
- The summary of dangerous is cigarette
Ncob, may be I think, in introductory paragraph must be arrange more systematic. The idea between one and the others sentences must have good correlation one another. So, the reader will more enjoy to read your writing.
BalasHapusOk, Ncob...
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